Job Application letter

This is honestly the best application letter I have ever wrote (at least that's what i think).

Hi, my name is Ju Ann Wong and i'm a current1st year pharmacy student in Curtin University of technology. I read about your employing advertisement and am very interested in it. Honestly speaking I have applied for more than 20 pharmacies but less than 5 of them actually replied so I'm really feeling a little unappreciated at the moment. I may not be the one with most experience and knowledge but i'm willing to learn. I may not have my own transportation but I will figure it out and promise will never ever be late to work. And I'm more than happy to begin my 500 hour training in your pharmacy. So, i really hope that you will consider my application. Thank you.

p.s. attached is my resume.

Yours sincerely,
Ju Ann Wong


I know it sounds despo but that's really what i'm thinking. It's not like i said it in person =p tat's what i like bout applying for jobs through email. What do you think?